Monday, February 15, 2010
First Hand Witness
Sitting with my dad, brother, and some of our employees just three rows up along the first base side of the diamond I anxiously waited for the warm-ups to conclude and the game to start because for the first time that season I was able to enjoy the game surrounded by forty thousand other screaming and passionate fans as we cheered on the Crew in hopes of a thrilling victory; today I wouldn’t have to just hear Bob Uecker’s hall-of-fame voice call the game over the Brewers Radio Network while I tilled the soil or just watch it on FSN Wisconsin while play-by-play announcer Brian Anderson passionately called the game with color analyst and former Major League catcher Bill Schroeder, but I could first hand watch the action as Yovani Gallardo went through the windup to throw an opening pitch breaking ball that just caught the black and fooled the batter into looking at strike one, and I could hear the batter up song as the left handed hitting Prince Fielder marched towards the batter’s box with hopes of adding another RBI to his yearly total, and, if the first eight innings went as planned, I could hear and feel the sound as Hells Bells rang loud enough for the neighboring community to hear while Trevor Hoffman trotted onto the field to close out a win in the ninth inning of another Brewers’ victory!
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The passionate Milwaukee Brewers fan and author of this prose vividly describes the scene of an intense Brewers game. Starting off, he sets the atmosphere of Miller Park stadium. Him, his dad and brother, and several of their employees anxiously waited for the game to commence. The real-life, in-person voice of announcer, Bob Uecker excited the fans. Hearing the game over a car radio was not enough, seeing it live was clearly an experience he will cherish forever and never forget. As the sentence continues, the description of the baseball game intensified with each play made. Clearly, Prince Fielder, a favorite player of many Milwaukee Brewers fans, is also a prized player in the eyes of the author. Much of the sentence goes on to explicate Fielder’s thought, batting statistic and plan of action. The author smoothly transitions from Prince’s run to Trevor Hoffman’s swing and hit of the ball, and then continues to wrap up the piece by cleverly shouting “another Brewers’ victory!” Instead of incorporating and announcing the Brewer’s win at the beginning or middle of the sentence, finishing out with it gives it the attention it deserves and obviously makes the phrase stand out as important, which it is because the Brewers are the best.
ReplyDeleteThe entire flow of the sentence remains constant and overall smooth throughout. The descriptive language does not sound forced. Each word and phrases meshes together to form one united sentence, and a sentence that flows well is always easy and pleasing to read.
The topic of the prose must be an event that is very special to the author if it provokes this much vivid detail about a game. The manner in which he cherishes every action, appearance and smell of the stadium proves that this was not just a normal outing. It is a big deal to sit along the first base, just three rows up. You can practically smell sweat from that height. It is clearly an experience that does not occur regularly. If it did, one could never remember this much detail of the game’s surroundings. This sentence does a wonderful job at painting the picture of another hard-earned Brewers’ win.